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Denali the outcast

Post  Den on Tue Oct 27, 2009 10:46 am

Chapter 1.

It all happned one night when Denali's mother malki looked down over her pups there were only two but they ment the world to her. Denali's father raven claw came running in and stood loloking at his two sons. Malki looked up and said what should we name them. The bigger on lets name him black paw for that one black paw and the runt Denali.
The names she said those are great names.
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Post  Den on Thu Oct 29, 2009 11:29 am

Chapter 2 growing up

Denali and his brother stade at the den for some time after one moon phase Denali and black paw were alowed to go out side but stay close. Day after day Denali and Black paw would go out and play each day they would stray father from there den. Then one day in may Denali and black paw were 9 moons old and they whent out of the den site to the creek to play around and try to get some fish.

As they looked around Denali say a cliff and looked over. He gazed at it for a moment then started palying with his brother. Black paw had just pined Denali down when there was a loud crak and black paw flew off the edge whith Denali still hanging on. the rest was a blur Denali woke up and saw his brother lay in front of with in a pool of blood. Denali rembered that right before the crak he saw somthing that looked like a tree holding a shining stick.

As the last thing Denali rembered was the packs alpha wolf picking him up by the scruff and luging him to his den where he fell in to a deep sleep. When he woke up there where wovles all around him talk all at once. What happened where did you find him and wheres blaack paw after that Denali fell back to sleep with out a wolf noticing him. The next day he woke up his mother was crying and so was his father. Denali rembering started to cry to. His mother and father walked over and asked what happened. Before Denali could say a word the alpha came rushing in and said the humans they are attacking. Hide fast he yelled. Denali spoke up and said that is what happened to black paw it was a human.

As the day tured to darkness the wimpers and yelps stoped and there was a low and almost crying like howl. Denali new that other wolves had died becuase of him out by the cliff let alone was it his brother but it was his pack mates alot of the wolves ones he had played with when he was a pup gone just like that.


Denali over herd the alpha talking to his parents. It was your pup that the hunter fowlloed he led them here I have no choice he must leave or i will kill him. Over hereing this denali knew that he had to go he new how to hunt now since he is a year old. So Denali ran out of the den the back way he had dug when he was a pup. On his way out he marked his sleeping awary to let his parents know that he was going to be all right.
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Post  Sakura on Wed Nov 04, 2009 10:21 pm

Denali, the story would be a little better if you put " when they 'talk.'
Like so: Sunclaw sat down. "Hi." she said.
But great story, nonetheless!
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